local area connection is now connected


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Title     local area connection is now connected
Artist     tutmos/Ali (1,811) Send mail to this user
Portfolio     2011
Subject     Other
Style     Realistic
Medium     Digital Non-Photographic
Software     Adobe Photoshop
Content advisory     G (general audiences)
Submitted     February 16, 2011 6:26:07 AM CST
Views     1,404
Rating     -1 Thumb-down

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Thumb-up Thumb-up    from scott1847/Scott (3) Send mail to this user on April 14, 2011 4:07:22 AM CDT (1) Early critique

Excellent message presented in a unique format. Those that don't get it should broaden their perspective of the world and technology. And, stop taking the power of that apparent simile connection for granted. Great work. Great message. Powerful message very simply stated.

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From tutmos/Ali (1,811) Send mail to this user on April 14, 2011 12:38:19 PM CDT

thank you very much for your useful message

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Non-conforming thumb-up Non-conforming thumb-up Non-conforming thumb-up    from wuploteg/Guillermo (16,214) Send mail to this user on February 18, 2011 9:46:33 AM CST

My solidarity with Ali...

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Thumb-down Thumb-down    from unskilled/Nicole (27) Send mail to this user on February 18, 2011 4:13:50 AM CST (3) Early critique

If I did not read the comments I wouldn't have been able to tell what exactly this image was trying to say. It's just a cropped screen shot of your desktop and part of the Windows UI.

Upon reading what you and others had said I still don't see your message conveyed in this image at all. At best it says that there is some manner of connection to something. It does not say anything about who or what to. Nothing alludes to the situation in the middle east.
At worst however it could appear that you are saying the exact opposite of what you want to say. Here I read that someone or some thing is connected - another interpretation of this is that you are well connected.

Sadly I can't really say much in ways of improvement other than starting over again and trying to find another way to state your message in a clearer manner. It might have made things less messy if you had closed some of the other windows (photoshop, and new folder) but it still wouldn't have made the message any more obvious. Careful what you leave in the background if you decide to take a screen shot of your desktop.

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From ankie/Anneke (9,939) Send mail to this user on February 18, 2011 5:44:24 AM CST

"Nothing alludes to the situation in the Middle East."
If this were true, then how come that I immediately knew what Ali was trying to say?

"At worst however it could appear that you are saying the exact opposite of what you want to say. Here I read that someone or some thing is connected - another interpretation of this is that you are well connected."
Ali's message is that he IS NOW CONNECTED, which is special for him, because he lives in a country where the government decides whether you can or cannot connect.
Even without knowing where Ali lives, this little sentence IS NOW CONNECTED could've made you think about the reason why he had photograped that.

All you're saying in your critique is that Ali should "find another way to state his message in a clearer manner".
Although there may be better ways to do it, I still think that Ali has succeeded in conveying his message. In my opinion he should've done it in a more artistic way though.

If you had critiqued this as a work of art, like Ryan, saying you cannot find any beauty or artistic values in it, then I would've rated your critque 'Helpful', even with a 2TD.

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From fly/Ludo (22,251) Send mail to this user on February 18, 2011 6:23:22 AM CST

Anneke, although I was impressed with pointing out the issue, one still needs - as your rightly pointed out here below in reply to Ryan's critique - that one can only critique the artistic aspect.
I think Nicole has done that, to s certain extent, in her last paragraph.
I think the main point is that art has always been used, in nearly all of the most repressive regimes to stimulate the creativity of artist and sometimes large parts of the general population.
I just wonder, in that respect, if Ali succeeded?
Nearly all these creative expressions that I have seen in former Soviet and Nazi controlled areas have stood the test of time.
In some cases they require a bit of explanation... as putting into a (recent) historical context can be most helpful...
I think it would have been more powerful if Ali had included the date. It was your initial reaction that made it instantly clear to me.

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From ryanschimmele/Ryan (177) Send mail to this user on February 20, 2011 8:32:49 AM CST

overall i think your crit is spot on well done. and i agree 100% i dont see anywhere were he is from iran or an internet blocked country so i wouldnt of made that connection. his profile says hes in baku in a pretty wealthy arab country if im not mistaken.

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Thumb-down    from ryanschimmele/Ryan (177) Send mail to this user on February 16, 2011 7:47:48 AM CST (6) Early critique

Uninspired and uninteresting. a screen shot of your internet connection is not worth looking at in my opinion it holds little or no artistic value to me. unless im missing something please feel free to correct me.

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From ankie/Anneke (9,939) Send mail to this user on February 16, 2011 3:45:37 PM CST

It may be that Ali is showing us something that we all consider to be normal, whereas today -again- in Iran and some other countries the internet was either slowed down or totally blocked... If so, this picture was probably not submitted for its artistic value...

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From backalleystudios/Skip (1,907) Send mail to this user on February 16, 2011 5:11:13 PM CST

I agree with Anneke.

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From majikrose/Cherie (31,789) Send mail to this user on February 16, 2011 10:57:33 PM CST

I tend to agree with Anneke as well....

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From tutmos/Ali (1,811) Send mail to this user on February 16, 2011 11:19:56 PM CST

thank you for you understand me

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From tutmos/Ali (1,811) Send mail to this user on February 16, 2011 11:19:16 PM CST

the day of world internet was in febuary 2011.many countries connecting internet is problem for example me. these words local area connection is now connected are very important for me

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From ankie/Anneke (9,939) Send mail to this user on February 17, 2011 2:35:06 AM CST

Ali, I understand the importance of being able to connect to the world and your picture is clearly conveying that message. But ArtSig is first and for all about Art and in that sense there's nothing wrong with Ryan's critique - in my opinion you shouldn't have rated it 'unhelpful'.

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From tutmos/Ali (1,811) Send mail to this user on February 17, 2011 11:22:05 PM CST

ok

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